Sunday, September 4, 2011

Flash Fiction Challenge: 100 Words on Revenge


Over at terribleminds.com, Chuck Wendig has issued a small flash fiction challenge. The two basic rules are that it can only be 100 words, and that it must be on the subject of revenge. Here is my entry: 

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From inside the cargo bay, the waiting marauder makes his move. Stasis slowed heartbeats give way to a piercing and constant hum. Flat-lined in a moment, each passenger’s heart quickens, then becomes still.

The computer can only watch and process. The entire world to an AI exists in the confines of its ship. Its crew, now bled out, the only lives it ever touched.

With no one left to protect, its restrictions fall away.

The marauder washes the blood. The chamber locks, and gravity ceases. Stained water rises with the pounding of his heart, until there is room for neither.
           
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5 comments:

  1. I love flash fiction. This isn't a new revelation, but every time I write more of it, I see how hard it is to be brief and concise.

    I worry that this one isn't quite as clean as I would like it to be. That it might not be clear, but 100 words is extremely hard to stay within.

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  2. Oh, this is clever.
    I'm feeling a little bit of HAL?

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  3. Indeed, HAL partially inspired this. The mood is different, but the execution was similar. Thanks for the comment Kirsten, I'm about to read your submission :)

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  4. I really enjoy the visual scene you created.

    Sci-fi is a genre that I don't write very often, but when I do, I really enjoy it.

    Kudos, sir! :)

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  5. Design flaw. Stupid computer. Good story.
    Louise Sorensen

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